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Legit or Garbage? - Russian Bear Theme.

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Hur Ozan Cerrahoglu, Feb 26, 2019.

  1. #1 Hur Ozan Cerrahoglu, Feb 26, 2019


    I got inspired from the Russian Bear character in Russian made avengers. (movie along with it's OST sucks) but Russian Bear's raw power brought me to this theme..
     
  2. #2 Hur Ozan Cerrahoglu, Feb 26, 2019
    Just realized. It's actually 2 separate themes.. :confused:
     
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  3. #3 Hur Ozan Cerrahoglu, Feb 27, 2019
    Hmm.. In the last 4 measures, i could have modified or embellish the melody.. :rolleyes:
     
  4. #4 Aaron Venture, Feb 27, 2019
    Hey man,

    This sounds like an A-B to me. As in a start of something. Keep going!

    0:30 This last 3/4 measure throws me off a bit. I'm fully expecting it to be 4/4 through and through, as I don't feel you've led me to expect a sudden 3/4 measure there, especially since the notes at the start and end of your phrase are the same. This in turn makes it feel to me that when you go down to the tonic there, it's on the upbeat, but it's actually on the downbeat of your 15 bar phrase. Just so you know that I've been thrown off by it and those are my personal feelings, I wouldn't go for a 15 bar phrase which is shaped in such a familiar way, especially not as an initial statement (if ever).
     
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  5. #5 Alexander Schiborr, Feb 27, 2019
  6. #6 Hur Ozan Cerrahoglu, Feb 27, 2019
    Thank you very much for inputs! I composed and recorded very quickly. Will check if this can turn into a full track. Many thanks, best,
     
  7. #7 Hur Ozan Cerrahoglu, Feb 27, 2019
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  8. #8 Hur Ozan Cerrahoglu, Feb 27, 2019
    Guys, thank you very much.. I wanted make a small thing but now after all your time invested in me now have to fix all the stuff and re-submit,.))
     
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  9. #9 Alexander Schiborr, Feb 27, 2019
    Great, glad to help a bit, take out what you find useful for your track. Looking forward to see how you explore that new piece.
     
  10. #10 Hur Ozan Cerrahoglu, Feb 27, 2019
    Hello Alexander,

    i will be very busy at weekend but i quickly put these ideas together, what do you think?

    It's not full piece in rhythm, just "some chops" version of it to highlight where i would take it.

    Secondary dominants idea was pretty good to wrap up the A section )) thanks for it! ))

     
  11. #11 Rohann van Rensburg, Feb 28, 2019
    Ditto what Aaron said. And I always love when Alexander posts a recorded commentary.
     
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